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Some working parents believe childcare centers can provide best care for children, while others think family members like grandparents can do it better. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 It is prevalent that working parents place their kids who are pre-school age in kindergarten, some others critic and argue that their children will receive a better level of care with their relatives. From my perspective, I strongly support putting our offspring in childcare centres. On the one hand, those that support childcare through grandparents cite several reasons for
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, they claim that
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 is the safest option due to the fact that they are family members so they can be trusted and will put the safety and health of their kids
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. Another consideration is the cost. there would be a huge cost for placing their kids in daycare.
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, young couples are already under heavy financial strains,
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 as mortgages, high gas prices and so on. With the help of family,it could save considerable expenses monthly and will ease their living burdens obviously.
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, the average spending of a preschool child in a daycare centre is approximately 30,000RMB per year in China.
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, despite those benefits, it has many advantages of placing them in daycare.
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 of all, the staffs in kindergarten are well trained, qualified and professional with early childhood education so that they can care for them well as well as help them develop creative,learning skills by painting, singing, and playing games. Another advantage is that they can learn how to get along with and socialise with their friends and teachers and they will be more confident and sociable later on. In conclusion, I deem that the advantages of using kindergarten outweigh the benefits of using relatives,
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 is because the environment of the childcare centres they were brought up in will help them cultivate creative, sociable, and confident personalities.
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