You were recently disrespected by one of the employees at your local supermarket. Write a letter to the supermarket manager. In your letter • tell why you were speaking with the employee • describe the employee's rude behavior • explain what you'd like the manager to do

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Dear Sir, I hope

this

letter finds you well. I am writing

this

letter to express my dissatisfaction with

behaviour

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the behaviour

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of one of your staff members at

store

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the store

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yesterday. His name is Rajesh Kumar and he works in

electronics

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the electronics

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section. I asked him about

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LG flatron

TV's

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, which

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was

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launched

last

month. I asked him about the specifications of LG's

televison

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television

, but he did not bother to reply and when I asked him repeatedly, he started

yieling

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yelling

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me. He humiliated me publically by passing derogatory comments.

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, he was not bothered about the

store

authorities and when I said, I

will

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lodge a complaint against him to the

store

manager, he started abusing me. I would like to urge you,

kindly

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take

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strict action against Mr. Rajesh Kumar, because with

such

behaviour he is tarnishing

store's

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the store's

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image. I propose

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you should ask him to apologise and make sure that he must not repeat

this

ever in future. I hope you will look into the matter personally and I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Jatinder.

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grammar

Remember to check for minor grammatical errors such as verb forms and articles. For instance, 'a LG' should be 'an LG' and 'televison's' should be 'television's'.

task response

Include a clearer statement about the specific action you'd like the manager to take. You've mentioned an apology and future behavior control, but a more detailed suggestion might enhance clarity.

structure

The letter includes a clear introduction, main body, and conclusion.

task achievement

You have addressed all aspects of the task, including reasons for speaking with the employee, description of the employee's behavior, and what you would like the manager to do.

tone

You have used polite and respectful language throughout, suitable for a formal letter.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

181 words

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