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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extend do you agree or disgree with this opinion?

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A number of
people
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 claim that the
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suitable method to get together humans who belong to diverse areas and customs is
music
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. I
definetely
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definitely
 agree with
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 opinion because I believe that
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music
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 has been
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a commen
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commen
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common
 language
for
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of
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 mankind.
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 with, it is known that some tools which are
intenalized
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internalized
internalised
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community
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the community
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 have been using a technique to resemble society behind the same aim or belief
such
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 as cinema as well as
music
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. In fact,
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music
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 which may involve songs or just
enstrumental
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instrumental
instrumentals
 composes,
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smothest
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smoothest
smartest
 way to reach
people
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 who have lived all around the world, due to the fact that it reflects basic emotions which
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all communities have had already.
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,
beside
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 composes which do not have any
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can
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that can
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 be understood by mankind, numerous songs which have been written
various
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by various
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tangues
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tongues
 might be internalized
the
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all
people
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 like being a fan of a popular singer without
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 any single word.
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, no one can deny that
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music
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 is the best way to get together
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all communities
have
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that have
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 lived
diverse
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in diverse
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 cultures and countries.
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,
for
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getting together
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people
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 by using
music
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 has been needed to perfect communication
system
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systems
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 or
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
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. To illustrate,
aftermath
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the aftermath
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 of the invention of
internet
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the internet
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 human-being have been provided to reach different
musics
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music
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 much more than
previous
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previously
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 by using online
music
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 platforms.
In other words
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,
although
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music
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 can reflect
same
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 feelings,
for
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to
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understandig
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understanding
 it
people
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 need to reach them
first
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.
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,
music
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 is
the
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quite important for
community
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the community
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, but
also
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 it needs some tools. To conclude, I
definetely
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definitely
belive
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believe
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 that
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music
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one
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is one
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 of the vital methods to get together
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.
However
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, using
proper
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 way which is technology to spread
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music
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 to over the world is
also
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cruiel
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crucial
cruel
.
Therefore
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,
music
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 and technology should be used together.
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