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The qualities and skills that people require to be successful in today’s world cannot be learned at university or at other academic institutions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In today’s world surrounded by various people's opinions and
expectations
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 it is increasingly difficult to adapt and be part of society. Social norms and peer pressure shape the world’s outlook and define how people behave.
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 I agree that certain qualities and
life
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 skills cannot be learned at educational institutions, I
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 believe that without an academic
basis
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basis,
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 it is impossible to succeed in the modern world. First of all, it is essential to mention that a lot of abilities are formed by our parents and circumstances, not schools or universities.
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,
life
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 tools
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 as communication, adaptation, problem-solving, stress management and confidence are learned over time and they are not acquired in any academic institution.
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, these
life
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 guides and bases are developing with human growth, so when you gain more
life
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 experiences, you become more successful in today's world regardless of your academic status.
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it is clear that
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 some
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 skills should be taught only in educational institutions, trying to succeed in a specific career field.
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, to get financial literacy you must go to
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 university that offers economics or, if you are willing to become a doctor, you must graduate from a medical university first.
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, some qualities are developed through education and you cannot learn them by yourself. In conclusion,
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 a lot of
life
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 skills and abilities can be learned from different
life
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 experiences, human growth and circumstances, some, more formal and professional ones should be acquired in academic institutions.

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Consider providing more specific examples that illustrate your points, particularly in the main body paragraphs. This would help strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your ideas flow smoothly from one to the next. Using more linking words or phrases could help achieve this.
coherence and cohesion
Good structure with a clear introduction and conclusion. The essay presents a balanced view on the topic, which is commendable.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • emotional intelligence
  • self-awareness
  • interpersonal skills
  • adaptability
  • resilience
  • networking
  • negotiation
  • time management
  • practical skills
  • real-world experience
  • academic knowledge
  • career advancement
  • foundational understanding
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