Public celebrations( such as national days, festivals, etc) are held in most countries. Theses are often quite expensive and some people say that governments should spend money on more useful things Do you agree or disagree?

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Every country celebrates some unique festivals or national

events

. These might not be very popular on a global level but they can hold a great sum of significance to the citizens. When we celebrate

such

days and

events

, there might a huge amount of money spent by the government. In my opinion,

such

fundings

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should be limited to a certain amount and governments shouldn't go overboard with

such

celebrations. On the one hand,

events

and public gatherings are

good

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reason

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to bring all the citizens together.

Moreover

such

parties don't

differienate

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differentiate

on who should attend and why. If planned right

such

days can

potray

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portray

a positive light on the

people

and can boost their morals too.

Additionally

, when cultures are happily shared and valued, humans form an active bond.

Also

, huge celebrations might

also

provide

with

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active tourism.

For example

the

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Chinese new year's day is very popular worldwide and

people

from all over the world travel to China in order to witness it

first hand

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On the other hand

, if too much attention is drawn towards decorations, foods and stalls, a lot of

goverment

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government

accquired

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acquired

money can be wasted.

However

, the key difference is what religious group celebrates what festivals. While

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some

people

might be faithful to their way of

celebrations

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, other

people

might find it to be a waste of time and space. In conclusion, the celebration of

events

should be widely accepted and

take

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care of. I agree that spending too

much

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resources on

such

days can be stressful but if plans are made in order

such

situations can be avoided sternly.

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Topic Vocabulary:

cultural heritage
economic boost
local economies
social cohesion
national unity
educational value
government spending
public services
healthcare
infrastructure
balanced approach
national identity
community
tourists
social harmony
historical significance
younger generation

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Public celebrations( such as national days, festivals, etc) are held in most countries. Theses are often quite expensive and some people say that governments should spend money on more useful things Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

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