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Some people think that keeping pets is good for Children while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy for them. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

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Nowadays having a domestic animal at home is a popular activity. While some would argue that it is harmful and detrimental to
pet
 creatures for young people because of the unawareness to safeguard themselves, I believe that it is better to have a
pet
, because adolescents learn how to cooperate and share things with each other. On the one hand, keeping children away from cats and dogs is a better solution to prevent getting injuries from them. If a mammalian creature bites or scratches someone before it gets vaccinated,
then
 the host has to go through the anti-rabies vaccine procedure properly. Unless the person will become a victim of rabies which is a fatal condition.
For example
, in Sri Lanka, a few months ago, there was a tragedy caused by rabies. A 14-year-old child was dead due to the ingestion of the saliva of a rabies-infected dog.
However
, I believe by treating domestic creatures with an anti-rabies vaccine as required, we can afford the kind of solution we need for
this
 problem.
On the other hand
, living with a
pet
 teaches younger ones how to share their things with others, how to play, and how to take care of others. By cuddling and patting their cat and dog, they learn the warmth of love which is a crucial element for the new generation. By sharing happiness and sadness with their pets, the younger generation absorbs the strength to manage their emotions.
This
 will lead to harmony in the world.
For instance
, Adolf Hitler, the dictator of Germany, lived his childhood with hatred and loneliness. He did not care for anyone and he might be unfamiliar with suffering and pain. I think
that is
 why he acted like a narcissist. So, I believe, to obtain a person full of kindness and empathy, keeping a
pet
 is preferable for every child. In conclusion,
although
 having a domestic animal is an unhealthier option due to serious illnesses that may occur, adolescents tend to develop their inner characteristics because of these adorable creatures.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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