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Many young people are leaving their homes in rural areas to study or work in the cities. What are the reasons? Do the advantages of this develoment outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays many young
people
 leave their
houses
 to
work
 or
study
 in another city. The main reason for it is that in the city the
education
 is better than in villages. In
this
 ,
the
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essay I’ll express my point of view about why young
people
 migrate from their
houses
.
Firstly
, as I said the main reason is that in cities
education
 and salary are better than in villages. But its disadvantage is that, if young
people
 want to leave their homes in rural areas, they should
study
 from 1-st grade as hard as they studied when they left their
houses
, because, if
they’ll
 not
study
 as hard, when
they’ll
 grow, they may pass in grant, but if
they’ll
 not
study
 as hard as it’ll be enough,
they’ll
 pass to university with the contract, so they will need to
work
,
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 because their parents will not pay them for
education
, because they have no money. So, when they will start to
work
,
they’ll
 not think fully about
education
,
they’ll
 partially think about
work
, public utilities and other things. So, leaving home in a rural area has advantages and disadvantages, the main disadvantage is that after young
people
 leave the house
they’ll
 need money, so mostly they will be waiters, but, to
work
 waiter is not so profitable, so
they’ll
 take a student
loan
. But as most financially adequate
people
 know, the
loan
 has many disadvantages, because you’ll
work
 maybe 2 years maybe 4 years to repay a
loan
. ,
,
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 I want to mention that, the reason for migrating from
houses
 is that, in ,cities
education
 is much better, so it has
also
 a big disadvantage, like a
loan
 or independent life.
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