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Advertising is all around us, it is an unavoidable part of everyone's life .some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives while others say it is negative. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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it is certain that advertising has become one of the most influential parts of our lives in
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 world. undoubtedly there
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 both advantages and disadvantages which
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 the reason that we use the advertisement for , plays the main role .
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 there are too many harmful and unnecessary products that
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 to our body which have been shown on television for many years
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 not think about it in
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 correct way , it can cause broad
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 of diseases.
moreover
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 advertisements can have
irrecoverable
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 impact
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peoples
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 lifestyles and the culture of a whole country ,
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 could be really harmful in the future.
on the other
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 people can meet the new products and a wide range of lifestyles from all around the world so they can choose what is good for them much easier than before.
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 take the view that people should be really informed about the benefits and the harms of each
advertise
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. based on my experience and observation advertisements are playing a really harmful role in our lives
especially
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 in young ages society. because companies and powerful countries make people think and live
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 their own way
earn
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 more money
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 we should get far from the
advertises
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advertisements
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 as much as we can.
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