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Some people think city planners should create more green spaces and plant trees. Others believe that they should focus on building new homes. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #city #planners #spaces #plant #trees #focus #homes
Nowadays,
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more people
lives
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 in
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industrial
cities
then
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 in rural
areas
.
Therefore
, there are a lot of issues considered by local
government
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governments
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on
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 how to develop their
cities
. One of these questions is about whether city planners should
built
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 more green space and plant trees in towns or
to
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build more new
houses
.
Although
,
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 the number of
houses
 and their affordability
are
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 valid concerns, I strongly believe that the number of green
areas
 and parks are the problems we should focus our attention on. Building new
houses
 might be
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 as the main goal of every city or
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town. When a local government pay a lot of attention to construction dwellings they stimulate the supply of new ones and
therefore
 decrease their prices. Simply saying, the more
houses
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 has, the more affordable they are.
Moreover
, affordable prices strongly influence one of the
most poor
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class
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 in every country - their students, especially from rural
areas
. It is not a secret that rental
payment
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payments
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 comprise a large proportion of total students’
spendings
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spending
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.
Consequently
, the lower the
houses
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 price, the more people can afford
studying
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. But despite these valid reasons, I think there are some other more important issues to
concern
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 about,
such
 as pollution and people’s rest. Green
areas
 or parks in
cities
 are the ones of that places where citizens can take a rest after a long and hard day, or spend time with their friends and family. So arranging more green space provides
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 better quality of citizen’s life.
Furthemore
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Furthermore
, planting more trees makes
air
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the air
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 in
cities
 cleaner, because trees consume carbon dioxide and emit
oxigen
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oxygen
, or simply
saing
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saying
, produce fresh air, which is, in my opinion, a more essential option for us living in
cities
 today. To conclude,
although
houses
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 affordability for different groups of our society is
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quite
significant
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 issue, I believe that
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air quality and the number of parks where people can spend their spare time are much better for everybody.
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