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People will buy a product if it has quality or fulfill their needs. There is no need for advertisement and considered as a form of entertainment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with it?

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It has been argued that quality and satisfaction are the two most important aspects that
people
 consider before buying new
products
.
however
, others believe that promoting goods
plays
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 an important role in decision-making and maximizing capital growth for certain ventures. in
this
 essay, I will explain why
advertisements
 are necessary for both
people
 and companies. On the one hand, the art of marketing is all about promoting
products
, convincing customers, and selling more items to generate more income. yet, most
people
 believe that buying the same brand of certain
products
 give them a sense of belonging and security,
therefore
 they won't change their mind based on
advertisements
 or others' opinions. recent studies from the University of Oxford revealed that 65% of
people
 go to stores to buy the same brand of shoes each year.
thus
, indicating that
people
 trust a certain company and there is no need for
advertisements
.
On the other hand
, it's factual that marketing strategies and
promotions
 lead to maximizing global domestic growth for companies. more specifically, when
people
 receive information about a promotion of their favourite product, they will go and buy them to catch the discount deal. some local surveys show that
people
 are more likely to buy promoted
products
 over
products
 they like. to sum up, most
people
 get confused when they see a lot of
advertisements
 before buying goods which can lead to distraction and quickly making a decision which they will regret later.
in contrast
, some
people
 think fewer ads and discount
promotions
 are just enough to help customers differentiate and buy a certain product.
finally
, I honestly believe that too many
promotions
 would not help customers make decisions but
instead
 make them intimidated and distracted.
similarly
, no
advertisements
 at all could make companies bankrupt.
thus
 I think fewer is enough and discount
promotions
 have helped me buy
products
 at a lower price and helped me save up some money.
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