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countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

#countries #people #products #world #development
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we are living in a globalized
world
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. Companies, in their quest to expand, are pushing their large-scale machine-made manufactured
products
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 to every nook and corner of the planet. In
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 phenomenon is detrimental to
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localized economies and their cultural developments. International
brands
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 significantly destroy
country's
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 cultural significance because the region's heritage and ethos are inextricably linked to its locally made artefacts. If
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global
brands
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 continue to expand their
products
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 to every corner of the
world
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, they might one day oust locally-made
products
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 which would be a loss of richness and diversity in the
world
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. What would be an Indian tea party without being served in a specially made soil cup called kulhad or Fijian coffee without its famous coffee
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not
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 forget that traditional
products
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 whether it is medicines, cosmetics, or wooden art provides employment to the local population. The spread of machine-made multinational
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 put cost pressure on local goods and it often brings in its wake a loss of jobs as people turn to buy these new
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 ,perhaps thinking that these
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 are more glamorous and stylish than what they used to buy.
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, tourism numbers may
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products
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 in every shop the
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 over is boring and it would not impel visitors to open their wallets in the same way as souvenirs unique to a particular area do. Some may say that everyone should have access to the same global
brands
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 but I think local
products
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 are best suited for local conditions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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