You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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Dear sir/madam, I am Kailaash from GEC 23rd room and I am writing to let you know about a few problems which I am facing with my roommate due to shared accommodation, including late-night parties which made me write

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letter. As you know, I work from home, including the weekends, and it has been very tough to manage my work and take my client class due to noise and late-night parties as well.

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, during the weekends the entire flat members play fun games and do not let others go to bed as they want some company to keep them occupied.

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, What about my work? How do I pay rent without working during a critical situation like Covid? I do not think I can live in

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hell,

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, I would like a room with basic facilities in a good community. I am ready to pay even extra money to come out of

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hell. Hoping that I would get into a nice society. I look forward to hearing your response to

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request. Best Regards, Kailaash.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

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181 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

accommodation officer
roommate
share a room
living arrangement
difficult to work
noise levels
study environment
privacy concerns
alternative accommodation
single room
academic performance
well-being
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