Some people suggest that a country should try to produce all the food for its population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Import and export of
foods
is a basic procedure which each
country
follows over the
last
decades. Some people
advice
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that governments should put some
efforts
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effort
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to produce most
foods
in their nation by importing a little
food
from
other
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another country
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country
. I fully agree with
this
phenomenon and the following essay
justify
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the point. To embark with, there are some significant reasons why I believe authorities should harvest
food
in
own
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their own
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country
.
The
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first
and foremost,
while
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when
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any government purchases
food
substances from other nations, they must pay in
international
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an international
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currency like
USA
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the USA
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dollar.
In addition
, they may have to pay three times higher than
own
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their own
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currency rate, which leads to unnecessary spending on
the
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food
item.
Moreover
,
this
process affects the economy of the
country
significantly;
however
, if governments grow
food
and other
food
ingredients in
homeland
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, they can save a large amount of money, which can be utilized for various development of
country
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the country
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.
Additionally
, harvesting and producing
food
in the
country
creates more
opportunity
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opportunities
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for
the
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employment.
For example
, more farmers, technical people, experts are required in
this
whole process and which in turn
reduce
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the rate of
the
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unemployment.
In addition
to
this
,
country
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can
also
gain a benefit
on
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a tax amount
that is
paid by new employees.
Hence
, To conclude, importing some
foods
is indeed necessary
although
I personally think that every
country
should take some
efforts
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to
producing
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produce
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most
foods
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food
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in
home
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the home
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country
that enhance
an
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economical
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growth as well as increase
more
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apply
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job vacancies for
worker
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workers
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especially farmers.
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