Essay #1: Technology have changed the way children spend their free time. Do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

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leisure

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is decreasing by leaps and bounds because of

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technology. Many pupils claim that it is changing their way of life. In my, opinion the position of the

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appears to be more rational. In

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elaborate on the countless positive effects and minute negative impacts of

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trend and

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will lead to a logical conclusion. There are myriads of reasons which will

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explain

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argument but the most preponderant fact is it is increasing children's decision-making skills. Another pivotal aspect is infants learns challenging task

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as coding and artificial intelligence from the

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, in the past, toddlers waste their precious

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in indoor sports namely Chess, and, Ludo.

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, now they learn crucial language from the

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, a survey conducted by the prestigious university Oxford revealed that children who use the

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more creativity power compared to those who spend in the traditional way.

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, adolescents in ancient times,

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fascinated by education.

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, the majority of kids are now fascinated by academic knowledge owing to the

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, there are some pitfalls that negate these arguments and which can certainly overwhelm the potential influence of

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, the most alarming one is the

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diminishing

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of kids

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in the past, infants love outdoor games in their leisure

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cricket, and, basketball. But, now child's like virtual games

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Pubg, and, Super Mario.

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, children use the

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in terrible ways to illustrate porn websites.

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, the article published in the eminent newspaper depicts that the

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steals money from innocent infants. Moving

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, it is pertinent to mention that the

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plays a vital role in crimes.

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, promote some diseases like cancer, and, fever. As well as the

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wastes their free

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on Facebook and, Instagram. To sum up, according to the argument aforementioned above, one can reach the conclusion that the perks of the

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are too great.

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, the minute's drawbacks should not be overlooked either.