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Parents should encourage their children to spend less time on study and more time on doing physical activities. Do you agree or disagree?

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Studies and physical
activities
 are both important in
child's
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 life. And children
this
 day spend their
time
 in
a different ways
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different ways
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. Some parents have debated whether their kids will spend most of their
time
 with physical
activities
 rather than studying. I disagree that parents should encourage their children to spend more
time
 with physical
activities
 than studying because kids will have a better
future
 if they will study more and some kids will lose their courage to take their schooling seriously.
First
 of all, to have a better
future
, the young generation should prioritize their schooling because by studying well, they will have
a better opportunities
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better opportunities
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 in the
future
.
For instance
, if they graduated with good grades. It is easier for them to find a better job in
their
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future
. Because companies prefer a new graduate with knowledge. And their skills will improve when they are hired.
Secondly
, it is
also
 important to spend
time
 with physical
activities
 but not as much as studying. Because if the young generation will hook
with
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 their
activities
 they will not have any more courage to study.
For example
, varsity players, spend most of their
time
practicing
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 because they are performing on behalf of the university. But the downside of
this
, they are not able to attend their classes.
That is
 why they are behind in their lectures. In conclusion, parents should encourage their young generation to study more and just spend a little
time
 on
activities
 for them to get active.
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