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New technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforminig the lives of consumers. To what exent do you agree or disagree wih this opinion?

#technologies #transforminig #lives #consumers #exent #wih
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It is a controversial topic whether skilled individuals
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 doctors and engineers should
work
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 in their educated
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, or in wherever they want to.
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 both of them have positive and negative aspects, I agree more with the latter.
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 of all, it is undeniable that experts working in the
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 where they are educated have the following positive and negative effects. With regard to the former effect, it helps to stabilize the economy of their
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 by securing professional resources.
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, if doctors and engineers will
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 in the
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 where they were trained, the problem of the shortage of them in their home
country
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 would likely not be occurred.
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, it will minimize the insecurity of local citizens.
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, to invent new technology, collaboration across the
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 is mandatory,
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 the drawback of
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 is that technological advancement would be slowed down. Meanwhile, if those professionals have the choices to
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 from any
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, it can pave the way to solve the
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 that we are facing right now,
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 as global south
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. If higher educated people
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 in an advanced
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 in the field, they will equip with more advanced skills.
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, it will help to solve the
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 saving the environment with new technology, and lives by advanced medicine, and improving the life quality of developing countries through their support. As we are living in the globalization era, I believe that cooperation across the
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 is vital to protect our lives and the Earth. Overall,
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 there are advantages of experts working in their trained
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, I believe that the advantage of giving a choice of
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country
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 to them outweighs tackling the
issues
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 that we are facing right now
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 as global south, decarbonization, cybersecurity, and so force.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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