Children's educaton is expensive. In some countries the government pays some of or all of the costs. Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

Teens
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education
is costly. In some
countries
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the executive orders finance some of or all the costs.
Although
children
's
education
is overpriced, I believe the advantages outweigh the drawbacks because the
goverment
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government
will invest
on
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teens
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teens'
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education
to have an educated young generation and there is a necessity to invest less
money
on
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arms. One of the disadvantages is that
education
is every year more costly for
everydoby
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everybody
in all parts of the world because it takes more than sixteen years for a person to reach a degree.
Firstly
, teens need food, clothes and transportation for at least fifteen years to be able to be ready to start school every morning, and
this
cost
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costs
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big
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amount of
money
.
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Furthermore
, some of these students will need a private tutor and
this
is sometimes unaffordable for many of them.
For instance
, in The United
States
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it is expensive to pay
tutoring
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for tutoring
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after school because
this
private assistance
start
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with
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fifty dollars per hour.
However
, I believe that even
this
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though this
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sounds costly, it is worth
to pay
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paying
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for it because these
teenegears
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teenagers
need to be prepared for the future. One of the advantages is that the
goverment
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government
has plenty of
money
to afford all these expenses and prepare these
children
to be able to obtain a degree.
Besides
this
, having a much more educated society might lead to
decline
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the indices of crime because the society will be
well- educated
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well-educated
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. Another advantage is that there is a huge necessity to invest less
money
in buying arms and
prepared
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preparing
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soldiers for war because it is preferable to think
an
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of an
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education
than think
on
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about
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conflicts. To explain
further
, the United States recently has
been
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given
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giving
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away
scholaryships
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scholarships
for young students who want to pursue a degree and those who had debts
was
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forgiven with the
promese
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promise
to keep going on their
education
. I strongly believe
this
is a preferable way of spending
money
because the
goeverment
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government
is
given
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a better future to our
children
and society. To conclude,
although
education
is overprice
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is overpriced
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, it is preferable to spend on
children
's
education
and their future than buying arms and training soldiers. For these reasons the advantages
far
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outcome the disadvantages.
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