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Some people think it is responsibility of a parent to provide their children with discipline and teach them with right and wrong. Others think it is more important for parents to nourish their children and provide them with safe environment. What is your opinion ?

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 modern era, people have different views with regard to the question of what is the important job for families toward their
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 whether to educate them properly or to feed and keep them nicely.In my opinion, I will stand in the middle between these views because I strongly believe that both views must be considered. On the one hand, home education is an important stage in
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's lives, the father and the mother both or individual have the master role in
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 stage.They can certainly teach their
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 the basic rules of life,
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 as cleaning, good behaviour and a lot of different positive manners. there are various types of methods that
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 can conduct to promote their
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's attitudes.The aim of schools is only to teach
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 educational materials without teaching them discipline behaviours, it is true schools teach students some ethical subjects,
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, they teach them in general and for educational purposes only.
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, I think that
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 should supply their
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 with good food and nice houses, basically because
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 is their basic job.We do not expect the government to feed our
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 if we have a good life and choose to have
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. In animals the
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 provide the
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 with food and protect them from other animals, it is biology job of
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 no one can expect them.In for ,
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 I believe the
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 are responsible for
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 role without exception. To sum up, the Family should have a lot of various actions in both directions, with that we can move forward and achieve new goals that help our society .
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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