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Some people think it is responsibility of a parent to provide their children with discipline and teach them with right and wrong. Others think it is more important for parents to nourish their children and provide them with safe environment. What is your opinion ?

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In
this
 modern era, people have different views with regard to the question of what is the important job for families toward their
children
 whether to educate them properly or to feed and keep them nicely.In my opinion, I will stand in the middle between these views because I strongly believe that both views must be considered. On the one hand, home education is an important stage in
children
's lives, the father and the mother both or individual have the master role in
this
 stage.They can certainly teach their
children
 the basic rules of life,
such
 as cleaning, good behaviour and a lot of different positive manners. there are various types of methods that
parents
 can conduct to promote their
children
's attitudes.The aim of schools is only to teach
children
 educational materials without teaching them discipline behaviours, it is true schools teach students some ethical subjects,
however
, they teach them in general and for educational purposes only.
On the other hand
, I think that
parents
 should supply their
children
 with good food and nice houses, basically because
this
 is their basic job.We do not expect the government to feed our
children
 if we have a good life and choose to have
children
. In animals the
parents
 provide the
children
 with food and protect them from other animals, it is biology job of
parents
 no one can expect them.In for ,
this
Correct determiner usage
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show examples
 I believe the
parents
 are responsible for
this
 role without exception. To sum up, the Family should have a lot of various actions in both directions, with that we can move forward and achieve new goals that help our society .
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