It is important for people to take risks, in both their professional lives and personal lives. Do the advantages of taking these risks outweigh the disadvantages
It is vital for individuals to take risks, whether in their
career
or personal lives. I think Fix the agreement mistake
careers
benefits
of risky actions outweigh Correct article usage
the benefits
drawbacks
. I explain some reasons in the Correct article usage
the drawbacks
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essay.
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following
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, without doubt
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a doubt
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in Correct your spelling
staying
staring
comfort
zone is a nice place because most Add an article
the comfort
a comfort
people
feel more comfortable and safe in this
area. Most of population
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the risk
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risks
failures
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thus
they prefer
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comfort
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the comfort
safe
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belive
that, Correct your spelling
believe
risk takers
are more prosperous. Add a hyphen
risk-takers
In other words
, risky behavior
may improve Change the spelling
behaviour
quality
of life in both personal life and professional. Correct article usage
the quality
For instance
, people
working in a company decide to leave their work in terms of start
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starting
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However
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a business, but it is worth Change preposition
to running
to begin
and make effort to get Change the verb form
beginning
exellent
income regardless Correct your spelling
excellent
just
thinking about negative points. If Change preposition
of just
people
get a
great Correct article usage
apply
result
after taking risks Fix the agreement mistake
results
then
they are satisfied with their lives. Moreover
, human beings get new experience
if they try new and risky actions, they identify their weaknesses Fix the agreement mistake
experiences
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on them Wrong verb form
work
finally
try to reduce failurs
as much as Correct your spelling
failures
failure
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they
,
because without taking Remove the comma
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a risk
the risk
risk
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risks
people
would never know what could have been.
Despite
, there are some drawbacks in Correct pronoun usage
thisDespite
risk
taker
life, which should not be neglected. Adults must try small risky Change noun form
taker's
behavior
if they choose huge ones it will have serious consequences. As an example, if individuals make a big decision in Change the spelling
behaviour
stock
market and Add an article
the stock
trad
without Correct your spelling
trade
any
enough information they will lose all their money Correct quantifier usage
apply
instead
making
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of making
profit
.
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a profit
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risky actions in terms of Change the verb form
trying
get
more Change the form of the verb
getting
experince
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experience
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new skills and Wrong verb form
learning
feel
more Wrong verb form
feeling
confidence
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confident
although
each action may have some disadvantages, but
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apply
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case
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negatives
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the negatives
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