When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out.it is possible to try and keep them alive.

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depended on natural resources. They were ritual and adapted their
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play a huge role in human
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provides us with many expensive things like
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cars ,trains, stylish clothes etc. Every citizen has
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there was no law against your
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. Overall,
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and traditions.
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trend is to accept modern clothes, jeans
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etc. For intense ,90%
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celebrate their
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their
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and khuwear on eid they get up early in the morning and went to
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for namaz. We
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was killing our
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because every citizen have
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to
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any
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, there was no restriction and law
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancement
  • Efficiency
  • Global connectivity
  • Cultural identity
  • Diversity
  • Innovation
  • Coexist
  • Sustainable
  • Eco-friendly
  • Energy-intensive
  • Practical skills
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Homogenize
  • Preservation
  • Global diversity
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