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The best way to solve the world’s environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other private vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#world’s #cost #fuel #cars #vehicles
There is no doubt that
environment
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 issues have been increasing day by day. Some believe that in order to mitigate
this
 concern the appropriate way is to increase the cost of petrol for
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the car
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car
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cars
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 and personal
vechicles
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vehicles
. I disagree with
this
 notion because of the rationales followings.
First
 of all, it is true that the number of cars and other transport has increased significantly. Every
second
 person has their own
vechicle
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vehicle
 due to
this
 not only
pollution
 has
rose
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risen
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 but
also
 the issue of traffic congestion has
occured
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occurred
.
In addition
 to that, if the
fuel
 prices
have
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rose
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, people might
shifted
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 to public transport and bicycle rather than their personal transport.
As a result
, less smoke would come from cars and the
pollution
 level has been decreased with time.
On the other hand
, some would say that there are various other environmental problems in the world
such
 as deforestation, global warming, climate change, water
pollution
 and many more. These
also
an
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needs
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need
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an
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urgent attention as they are
threat
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a threat
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for
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 the world as well. Only increasing
cost
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 of
fuel
 would not help.
Furthermore
, due to the advancement in technology, scientists have been able to develop several alternative ways
such
 as
they
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apply
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move to adopt clean energy sources
instead
 of fossil fuels. Fossil
fuel
 is the major factor
which
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apply
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contributing
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in
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the
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pollution
most
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. In conclusion,
although
 due to increment in
fuel
prices
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,prices
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 the problem can not
be
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be eliminated
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eliminated
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eliminate
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eliminated
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 as there are
also
 various other
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environment-related
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environment related
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environment-related
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 concerns which could be curbed by other alternatives.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • excessive use
  • encouraging public transportation
  • sustainable energy sources
  • hydrogen-powered vehicles
  • generate additional revenue
  • environmentally friendly projects
  • disproportionately affects
  • lower-income individuals
  • accessible public transportation options
  • sudden hikes
  • inflation
  • social inequality
  • renewable energy
  • promoting carpooling
  • equitable
  • addressing environmental issues
  • punitive measures
  • sustainable lifestyle
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