You are doing an evening course.Write a letter to the principal of your school and explain that the course that you are taking is slightly different in the way it is delivered from what the school offered. Provide the details of the course Explain what the problem is Give some suggestions to fix the problem

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing with regard to a conversations

classes

included in the English course which are not being done as promised by the school. Two weeks ago, I have been enrolled in your 5 weeks English Course and the contract was based on a schedule of 4 days of theoretical

classes

plus one conversation meeting every Friday, in different points of the city

such

as pubs, museums, parks and so on. The issue is that all practical

classes

were made in the library with colleagues of the same level as me, which harms the development of language skills because as students we do not correct each other, and there is no exchange and immersion in the culture of native speakers.

As a result

, the improvement is unsatisfactory. As the mistake was caused by your staff members which did not schedule the events, I strongly recommend you hold two conversation

classes

in the following weeks, Friday and Saturday, to replace what we have missed and extra activity,

such

as a speech from a Univesity Lecturer, as a bonus to compensate

this

inconvenience. Looking forward to receiving your prompt response. Yours sincerely, Pollyanna Souza

Submitted by pollyannamsouza on Sun Jan 22 2023

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Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

One main idea per paragraph

Include greeting and closing

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

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