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The crime rates now-a-days is decreasing compared to the past due to advance technology which can prevent and solve crime. Do you agree or disagree?

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These days, the quantity of
crime
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 cases is considered declining compared to the previous by the reason of sophisticated
technology
. I stand with
this
 perspective supported by some
evidences
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evidence
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 that will be elaborated along
this
 essay. The advancement of
technology
 has been making
people
's lives easier, unexceptionally on how to save their money which gives impact on decreasing criminal chances.
Majority
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The majority
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 of
people
 in developed countries drop their preference to secure their savings in reliable financial institutions. Many banks or other saving
money-alliances
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money alliances
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 are now applying high-functional security systems that
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are unable
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unable
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enable
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any
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 stealing trials. Due to
this
 fact, the possibility of money theft can occur is now lower
more
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than ever.
Additionally
,
by
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 the development of
technology
, awareness
on
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of
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 securing assets among
people
are
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 raising. Everyone can effortlessly find useful
informations
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information
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 about how to protect or even develop their assets by watching several videos on social media platforms. The growing number of interests among
people
on
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in
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 financial education topics
make
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makes
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this
 concern more evident rather than in the past
where
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when
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people
tent
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tend
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 to be careless of their own assets which eased criminal subjects to thrive. To conclude, I totally agree that the advancement of
technology
 has been scaling the crime rates down due to more protective systems and
raise
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the raise
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of
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 awareness among
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • surveillance
  • deter
  • crime prevention
  • DNA profiling
  • forensic science
  • social media
  • neighborhood watch
  • suspicious activities
  • sophisticated
  • cyber-attacks
  • socio-economic inequalities
  • digital divide
  • reforms
  • crime rates
  • technological advances
  • criminal activities
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