Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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21st
century when Change the article
the 21st
traveling
to all Change the spelling
travelling
part
of the world is accessible and international tourism take place in one of the most profitable Fix the agreement mistake
parts
industry
some part of citizens think that it Fix the agreement mistake
industries
is creates
tension rather than Change the verb form
creates
understanding
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an understanding
the understanding
of
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apply
cultures
between people from various countries
. There is
different people and Change the verb form
are
accordingly
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opinions Replace the word
diverse
about
indicated Change preposition
as
from
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in
above
statement.
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the above
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of all
travelling around the world and learning Add a comma
,all
to
something new excellent way to grow up our Change preposition
apply
mind
and change to good side our outlook on life. I supported international Fix the agreement mistake
minds
traveling
and want to Change the spelling
travelling
visited
many Change the verb
visit
countries
where
I was not visited in the past, and if tourists from abroad came to Kazakhstan to Correct word choice
that
traveling
I will happyChange the spelling
travelling
,
because Remove the comma
apply
this
is good
opportunity to make good impressions and Add an article
a good
opinion
about our Fix the agreement mistake
opinions
country
. Many people think that if different cultures
encounter it will Wrong verb form
start
started
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tostarted
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discussions
argument
. Fix the agreement mistake
arguments
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first
time it will be Change the article
the first
dispute
and Correct article usage
a dispute
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a different
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of view Fix the agreement mistake
points
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something but if both individuals will express Correct your spelling
on
an opinions
it should find Correct the article-noun agreement
an opinion
opinions
the
point of agreement and mutual understanding Correct article usage
a
of
the two sides.
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between
On the other hand
in many ways of communication of
two Change preposition
between
cultures
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, for example,
for example
Muslim and Christian ends
with misunderstanding and dispute. Because it is not normal in Muslim Change the verb form
end
countries
wearing
short dresses and Change the verb form
to wear
drinking
alcohol in public placesWrong verb form
drink
,
but in European Remove the comma
apply
countries
it normal
lifestyle Add a missing verb
is normal
drinking
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drink
ang
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and
taking
drugs. When tourists from America or Australia visited Wrong verb form
take
countries
where
adhere to strict traditions, Correct word choice
that
tourist
do not understand it and will not want to visit in Fix the agreement mistake
tourists
second
time Muslim Add an article
a second
country
. And I think that it need
to respect Change the verb form
needs
faith
of visiting Add an article
the faith
country
and before attendance Correct article usage
a country
find
out and read on the Internet what is permissible and what is not in a particular Change the verb form
finds
country
.
In conclusion
because it Add a comma
,conclusion
needing
to visit many Wrong verb form
need
countries
in world
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the world
by
work or by Change preposition
for
traveling
every person should to take only good and positive Change the spelling
travelling
experience
from travel and from Fix the agreement mistake
experiences
cultures
of visiting Correct article usage
the cultures
country
and trying to get on well with habitants
at least until the end of the trip.Correct article usage
the habitants
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