Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.

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Computers

are widely used as a source of learning in the field of education.

While

few perceive it as a positive development, others believe that it has adverse effects.

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will be described why I tend to agree with the former opinion. First of all, from numerous people’s

point

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of view over usage of

computers

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addiction to

this

gadget.

This

is because the internet opens the whole world in front of a student.

As a result

, they get access to unrated sites and addictive video games which affect their character and make them lead a sedentary lifestyle.

For instance

according to

a survey, there has been a significant hike in health issues among teenagers over the years and the reason is the prolonged sitting in front of

computers

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, it cannot deny

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sides of

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gadget in

education

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sphere. Supervised access to

computers

for a limited amount of time can help students with their studies and pave their path to success.

In addition

, advanced technology does play a tremendous role in schooling and developing

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learning potential.

Hence

, students get access to more information than before which helps them to make a survey and learn with just a click of a button. As an illustration, Websites like Wikipedia, National Geographic and other educational links can enhance their knowledge and vocabulary. In conclusion, in spite of the introduction of

computers

into the classroom does have some drawbacks, I think that if

this

type of gadget is used for the right purpose, it will boost the knowledge of students.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

People living in the 21st century have a better quality of life than the previous centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some people think that they are the best people to teach school students the danger of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

what can we do to protect the environment? What are the solutions for this?

Some people think the government should pay for health care and education, but there is no agreement about whether it is the government’s responsibility. What is your opinion?