Some say that news has no connection with most people’s life and it is waste of time for most of us to read newspapers and watch television news programs. Do you agree or disagree?

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In tandem with the development of society and media,
news
nowadays is really abundant. While some
people
assume that
news
on
newspaper
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and television programs do not expose truly human
life
, I partly believe that there is some
news
which is still useful and worth accepting. On the one hand, it is true that some
news
contents are not relevant to most
of
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individuals’
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real
life
. To be more specific, a large amount of
news
published is about
celebrities’s
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life
or political events. In some cases, human
life
seems to be very different
with
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this
news
so accumulating
this
news
is dispensable.
Besides
, there are
many
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other unfaithful
news
that is
not checked thoroughly before being uploaded on media, which leads audiences to have inaccurate views towards
life
events or
people
around, which demonstrates clearly that reading or watching
this
news
on
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newspaper or television is waste of time or even negative.
On the other hand
, I believe that
news
will be useful provided it is reliable.
Firstly
, there is a fact that human
life
is not only affected by events happening directly around them but
also
all others indirectly.
Hence
, all the faithful
news
is necessary for
people
to update, because they will not know whether it will affect them or not in the future.
In addition
, there are still many official sources of
news
which is informative and reliable
such
as national
news
program on television,
Government’s
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newspapers and so on. Clearly, all
this
news
has been checked considerately before being published, which
ensure
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the quality of
news
. In conclusion, if
news
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is reliable, it will probably
essential
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for
people
to receive because all of what is happening around
can
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them can
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suddenly affect human
life
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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