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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicls will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweight the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, There is a serious debate on
driverless
 cars, and these vehicles will move passengers without any driver. At the same time, there are some drawbacks associated with
driverless
 machines. I believe the main benefits are more substantial. On the one hand, a potential disadvantage of
this
 type of car is that it can cause an increase in the number of unemployed.
In other words
, people can lose their jobs,
such
 as public
transport
 drivers.
Also
, individuals can become too reliant on technology. In my personal experience, one of my friends uses computer algorithms to do their job, and after a year, once her system had a technical problem, she did not even remember her task of how can do it.
On the other hand
, a primary benefit of the
driverless
 car is robots do not have emotions.
Although
 they can not impress by human behaviour, they do not make mistakes. And
also
, these kinds of cars can reduce the number of accidents that happen by human errors
such
 as bad habit driver and carelessness.
Thus
, they can drive better than humans even in bad conditions like as bad weather and bad visibility.
In addition
, using
driverless
 public
transport
 can reduce the cost to governments.
Moreover
, it can enhance public
transport
. On balance, It is true
driverless
 vehicles would seem disadvantageous under certain circumstances.
However
, I believe the positive effects in terms of automation can decrease human errors can, develop the condition of driving and
also
 can lead to the development of public
transport
, and governments can save more money by using
driverless
transport
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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