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n the past, most people used to travel to their place of work. With increased use of computers, the internet and smartphones, more and more people are starting to work from home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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In today`s contemporary ,
world
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 we are living in
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 technological era where people stop driving to
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, due to the dramatically increased use of electronic devices and it promotes that clerks remained in their houses
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 because they can
work
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 online.
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, one of the positive aspects of working from
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 is liberty.
Employee
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 who works from
home
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 have only one deadline, they do not have a strict supervisor who checks their
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 every 10 minutes.
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, they can create your comfortable schedule.
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, you do not to
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 spend extra
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 on trips from the house to
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Instead
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 you can read more books or you can make
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 for your family. As far as I am concerned working from
home
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 is convenient.
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, my father has to
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 from
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 and he loves it
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 because he has more free
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 compared to his colleagues who go to the office every day.
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, employees who
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 from the house often have a tremendous problem with their health, because they often forget to
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 out and
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 is harmful to the backbone.
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, people may have obese if they will spend
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on
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only working.
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, my friend has been working in IT since 2019. He spends more than 10 hours sitting at the computer and he does not do any actions for his body. Currently, he has health problems with obesity and backbone and
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 is hard to fix.
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, if he does
work
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 out, he will not have any problems with his health. To sum up, working from
home
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 has bigger advantages than disadvantages. working from the house is supposed to be convenient and employees could have a flexible schedule.
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