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Prices of fuels should be increased. This will solve the problems of environmental hazards . Give your opinion

#prices #fuels #hazards
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Fuels are the major
sources
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 of
energy
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 production which are used in many processes like to
use
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 of vehicles, industries etcetera. Burning produces more air pollution and increases global warming ,which affects the
environment
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 in a bad way. Some believe that rates of
energy
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sources
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 should be raised so that people will stop the unnecessary
use
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 of it more. But I feel apart from it there are several alternatives to save the
environment
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 like using solar
energy
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 . To support my views, I shall discuss them In the following paragraphs.
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 with, the weather is polluting day by day due to the emission of harmful gases released by the combustion of fuels. The temperature of the earth is
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 increasing. A major cause is a rise in the number of vehicles and industries, which consume these non-renewable
sources
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. Some sections of society believe that if the prices of these will go up ,people will eventually stop using them more or will not waste in excess.
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 will probably help in protecting the
environment
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. For ,example people will definitely feel the excessive load of money only before driving the private vehicle than other expanses of the house. Adding to
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, other methods of
energy
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 production can be applied
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 as using solar power. It can be used used in factories to ignite engines
instead
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 of petrol or diesel. With the
use
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 of solar ,power there is no emission of harmful fume like with the
use
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 of other fuels. Along with
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 , vehicles can
also
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 be used for electricity, as many companies manufacture
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 cars. For ,instance recently Hyundai launched a new car in the market which can be operated with electricity.
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, it would be more eco-friendly. In summary, I criticise
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 notion of hiking the prices of fuel to save the
environment
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 because various other ideas can be implemented to lessen the
use
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 of these
sources
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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