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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situationsuch as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

#people #situationsuch #job #shortage #money #situations
Bad
situations
 are part of
life
 in human beings.There are various
situations
 like Bad and Good
situations
,
Whereas
 we have to provide potential solutions to address these
situations
 in
life
. Many will say we should accept
this
 Bad situation,
such
 as Unsatisfactory
Jobs
 for a better
life
 as compared to being unemployed
while
 some will argue. I believe we should focus on improving these
situations
 as unsatisfactory
jobs
 or shortage of money lead to medical problems, a result Which affects our mental well-being. Most believe that cash is required in
life
 to live happily and fulfil family requirements.
For example
, If there is only a single guy who is bread earner of the family, he will be forced to continue his job rather than focusing on an Insufficient salary and work-
life
 balance in the profession.In order to sustain in an inflation market. I strongly believe Satisfactory Job led to sufficient funds,In order to live happily in
life
.
For instance
, If someone is not happy with his/her profession it affects his/her mental strength, Which can lead to serious medical conditions,
such
 as depression, heart problems , and hair loss in the future.
Additionally
,We should always try to improve our work-
life
 balance and pay scale on the job , these things will definitely help our mental fitness and well-being. In conclusion, If we try and improve our Unsatisfactory
jobs
 it enables a positive impact on
life
.
On the other hand
, If you still continue an Unsatisfactory career under social or family pressure it will somehow affect your health.We should provide solutions to address the consequences of unsatisfactory
jobs
 on our mental health, We should be aware our societies the negative impact of unsatisfactory
jobs
 on human lives
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