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Some people think that lawbreakers should be sent to prison. However, others think that better talents among those should be made to work. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is controversial whether lawbreakers should be sent to prison or if it is better to choose the talented crowd for good causes and make them productive.
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 essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail. From my perspective, lawbreakers should serve the best of the vicious
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crime
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 they have committed, there should not be any violation of
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law.
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, isolating them from the nation can be beneficial for the country’s safety. They should receive adequate punishments and realize their faults for committing a crime before they are released
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society ,
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 those wrongdoers will commit more crimes as a habit. Some criminals even with rehabilitation centres and jail time turn towards misconduct.
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 offenders with professional talents or who have the potential for improvement should be granted an opportunity to work under imprisonment, so when they are released, they have plenty of skills and expertise
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example they can easily do handyman jobs like plumbing, construction ,
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electrician
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, and rather
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 to study and
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professionals like lawyers, doctors and many more, they can earn and make
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 after having the knowledge for it. In
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conclusion, criminals should be trained under imprisonment for
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 better future
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 to not fall back into another crime and
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should be disciplined
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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