Some people think that lawbreakers should be sent to prison. However, others think that better talents among those should be made to work. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is controversial whether lawbreakers should be sent to prison or if it is better to choose the talented crowd for good causes and make them productive.

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essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail. From my perspective, lawbreakers should serve the best of the vicious

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they have committed, there should not be any violation of

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, isolating them from the nation can be beneficial for the country’s safety. They should receive adequate punishments and realize their faults for committing a crime before they are released

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those wrongdoers will commit more crimes as a habit. Some criminals even with rehabilitation centres and jail time turn towards misconduct.

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offenders with professional talents or who have the potential for improvement should be granted an opportunity to work under imprisonment, so when they are released, they have plenty of skills and expertise

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they can start their life again in a better way. For,

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professionals like lawyers, doctors and many more, they can earn and make

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conclusion, criminals should be trained under imprisonment for

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to not fall back into another crime and

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should be disciplined

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. For the closure, equal rights should be presented for the type of criminals

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction
Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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241 words

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