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It is becoming increasingly popular for people to travel to tourist destinations during public holidays. What problems does this cause? What solutions are there to these problems?

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Many
people
 believe that taking a break once in a
while
 is just as important as leading a busy monotonous life.
Hence
, public holidays have become one of the most awaited days in one's calendar.
However
, the rise of popularity in certain destinations has caused many negative incidents and in
this
 essay, I would like to discuss these problems and how to overcome them. To start with, an uncontrolled crowd is a major issue. If a stampede of
people
 travels to the same destination at the same time, it will be congested very quickly.
This
 will cause disturbance to the travellers as they cannot enjoy the views or have a calm day. It is even disturbing to the
people
 living in or around the
tourist
 attraction.
For example
, in my country, there is a large influx of crowds visiting the national safari parks during public holidays.
This
 has caused great disturbance to the wild creatures to a point that they are nowhere to be found when the safari jeeps enter the premises. To prevent
this
, they should have a limited number of
people
 that can enter a place at a time and proper maintenance of the crowd is essential.
Also
, not every person who travels is eco-friendly. Some may litter everywhere and cause damage. Recently, some of the world-famous beaches in Thailand were closed because of the detrimental effects caused by adventure seekers. The comparison of before and after photos showed a great loss of flora and fauna, dirty beaches and decayed wild habitats. So, to prevent these problems the government should join hands with
people
 and educate them about the importance and values of the
tourist
 areas and why we should protect them. The areas with high
tourist
 demand should be well developed with resources. The rule-breakers must be punished and proper laws must be implemented.
Overall
, the problems of overcrowding in famous
tourist
 attractions during holidays can be avoided using a variety of location and time-specific solutions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overcrowding
  • increased prices
  • environmental damage
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • cultural degradation
  • limited availability
  • waiting lines
  • tourist attractions
  • conflict
  • local residents
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