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Visa regulations should be relaxed for overseas students. Do you agree or disagree?

#visa #regulations #students
To
persue
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pursue
peruse
 higher education
in
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abroad
to
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 a renowned University in a desired subject every year many foreign pupils travel
one
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from one
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country
 to another.
Therefore
, they have to pass through many hard and strict
visa
policies
.Personally,
i
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 totally agree
to
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this
 statement that
visa
 and immigration
policies
 should be made easier. Let us try to understand why
this
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these
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visa
 requirements and
criterias
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criteria
 to be made easier.
Firstly
,
visa
 and immigration
policies
 of most of the
country
expects
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 a high score band language test,SAT,
TOEFL
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 which is not possible to obtain easily by most
of
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the
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apply
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talented and meritorious
students
 from different
liguistic
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linguistic
 countries.
For instance
,Apprentices from china and japan are not very good
in
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the english
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english
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English
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 language.
Therfore
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Therefore
,it is quite hard for
a
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chinese
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Chinese
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students
 to
persue
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pursue
 their desired subject
in
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at
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 a foreign university.
Secondly
,Apart from
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linguistic
matters
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 there are
policies
of
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on
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 work experience,
medical
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and medical
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test
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tests
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.Without having
a
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apply
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long term
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long-term
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 work experience or research
paper
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papers
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 new
students
 may not be accepted by universities.
For example
,
Students
 who
wants
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want
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 to
persue
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pursue
 PHD they need to have research article and work experience.
Otherwise
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,Otherwise
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 university will not issue CAS.
Furthermore
,there is
a
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 issue of contagious
disease
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diseases
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 all around the world.Many
country
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countries
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 have strict regulations in terms of accepting
foreigner
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foreigners
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 from the affected
country
 and
such
 terms directly
affecting
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affect
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 the
students
.
Finally
, pupils have to
gone
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 through many
process
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processes
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 which is
time consuming
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time-consuming
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 and costs a lot of money. Poor families may not be able to bear
such
 expenses.
To conclude
,It is very important to reconsider the situation so that skilled and efficient
student
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students
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 can admit
on
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to
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 their desired universities to
persue
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pursue
 higher education.
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