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Today people can work and live anywhere they want, because of the improvements in communicant technology and transport. Do advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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, People easier to contact others than before because of
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improvement
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improvements
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 in technology in any
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such
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communication
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system
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systems
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 or
transportation
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and
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which
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 made them without
border
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. I strongly agree that
those development
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 really have
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 more than disadvantages.
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,
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communication
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 part had
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innovation
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 to produce
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ever
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every
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years
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year
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 because they had
internet
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an internet
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 ecosystem or smart platform, namely
in
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an
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 application platform that we call IOS or Andriod with provide
oppotunity
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opportunity
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initiate
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 their notion to a real product in platform with have many
benefit
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 to users and in the
currently
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camera
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 with can provide them talk with other from across the
world
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 by one click. Another example,
the
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solution
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 devices to make their customers meet the special
experienced
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such
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 as metaverse
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developed by Meta company with
a
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oppotunity
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opportunity
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a
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roles play in
animation
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the animation
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world
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. In the other section,
transportation
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also
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 had many
improvement
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improvements
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 as well. In the past, when people want to travel
to
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somewhere
with
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far from their position must take more time
in
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by
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 train or bus but
in
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the
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currently
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, they have bullet
train
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trains
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 with have fast movement more than and can get them
to
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anywhere by
little
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 hours. And the other
think
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thing
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 as I mentioned in
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second
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 paragraph, the ticket or
transportation
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 information
be
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is
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 easier to get
them
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on
website
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 or any application in the same way
with
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communication
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. It can
summary
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summarise
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 that
current
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the current
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world
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have
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many
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 beneficial
product
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products
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 to support the
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 and meet
the
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user need. As in
transportation
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 or
communication
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 will have many
choice
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choices
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 and
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solution
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solutions
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 to choose more than and get
thwm
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them
the
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