In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers ae not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompained by an adult. what is your opinion about this?

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In some parts of the US, youngsters are not allowed to go outside without adult supervision during late hours of

night

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. To a certain extent, I agree that

this

can protect children from dangerous factors.

However

, I

also

think that

teenagers

have

their

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right

to move freely. On the one hand, I would agree that

curfew

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can provide safety and security to

teenagers

. It is undeniable that in many big cities, crimes tend to be more active at

night

. During

this

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hours, wandering alone will never be

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the

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right

choice for children since they can be lured,

threaten

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or even attacked by crimes. But being with elders,

teenagers

can be safer as criminals may not dare to make any inconsiderate actions.

Moreover

, at

night

, things are

hader

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hard

to recognise

as a result

of the darkness.

In other words

, there are possibilities of being lost when

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going

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outside at

night

For example

, just by some simple searchings, we can easily find many cases of missing

happeing

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happening

during the late hours of

night

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However

, I disagree with the idea that using curfew as a tool to restrict

youngers'

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younger'

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freedom. It is

human

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a human

the human

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right

to be able

moving

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to move

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around freely.

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prevent

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preventing

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people from

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going

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out at

night

without a

supevisor

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supervisor

government

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the government

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has directly disclaimed that basic

right

eventhough

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even though

that is

for

teenagers

' good.

Furthermore

, going out with an adult is not always a feasible choice for children

especially

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with

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apply

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those who have parents or caretakers

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who work

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work

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late

such

as doctors, guardians or 24-hour store employees. In

this

case, even returning home from

friend's

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a friend's

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or relative's house can be a big problem. In conclusion,

although

government should have some rules to prevent

teenagers

from

geting

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getting

outside when it is late,

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still believe that there should

be reconstruct

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to suit

with

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different demands.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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300 words

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In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers ae not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompained by an adult. what is your opinion about this?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Many people think that the behavior of professional sportsmen off the field is not important as long as they are good players. To what extent do you agree or disagree with it?

Some people believe that reading stories from a book is better for children than watching TV or playing computer games.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Subtleties of banking: understanding the interdependence of depositors and borrowers.

People who have original ideas are of much greater value to society than those who are simply able to copy the ideas of others well. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people claim that goverments should be responsible for taking care of the essential needs of the elderly, while others argue that it should be the elderly that should do so. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.