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In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers ae not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompained by an adult. what is your opinion about this?

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In some parts of the US, youngsters are not allowed to go outside without adult supervision during late hours of
night
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. To a certain extent, I agree that
this
 can protect children from dangerous factors.
However
, I
also
 think that
teenagers
 have
their
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right
 to move freely. On the one hand, I would agree that
curfew
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 can provide safety and security to
teenagers
. It is undeniable that in many big cities, crimes tend to be more active at
night
. During
this
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these
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 hours, wandering alone will never be
a
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the
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right
 choice for children since they can be lured,
threaten
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 or even attacked by crimes. But being with elders,
teenagers
 can be safer as criminals may not dare to make any inconsiderate actions.
Moreover
, at
night
, things are
hader
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hard
 to recognise
as a result
 of the darkness.
In other words
, there are possibilities of being lost when
go
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going
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 outside at
night
.
For example
, just by some simple searchings, we can easily find many cases of missing
happeing
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happening
 during the late hours of
night
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.
However
, I disagree with the idea that using curfew as a tool to restrict
youngers'
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 freedom. It is
human
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a human
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right
 to be able
moving
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to move
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 around freely.
By
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To
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prevent
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preventing
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 people from
go
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going
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 out at
night
 without a
supevisor
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supervisor
,
government
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the government
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 has directly disclaimed that basic
right
eventhough
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even though
that is
 for
teenagers
' good.
Furthermore
, going out with an adult is not always a feasible choice for children
especially
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with
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apply
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those who have parents or caretakers
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who work
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work
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working
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 late
such
 as doctors, guardians or 24-hour store employees. In
this
 case, even returning home from
friend's
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a friend's
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 or relative's house can be a big problem. In conclusion,
although
 government should have some rules to prevent
teenagers
 from
geting
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getting
 outside when it is late,
i
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 still believe that there should
be reconstruct
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 to suit
with
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different demands.
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