In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers ae not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompained by an adult. what is your opinion about this?

In some parts of the US, youngsters are not allowed to go outside without adult supervision during late hours of
night
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. To a certain extent, I agree that
this
can protect children from dangerous factors.
However
, I
also
think that
teenagers
have
their
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right
to move freely. On the one hand, I would agree that
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can provide safety and security to
teenagers
. It is undeniable that in many big cities, crimes tend to be more active at
night
. During
this
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hours, wandering alone will never be
a
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right
choice for children since they can be lured,
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or even attacked by crimes. But being with elders,
teenagers
can be safer as criminals may not dare to make any inconsiderate actions.
Moreover
, at
night
, things are
hader
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hard
to recognise
as a result
of the darkness.
In other words
, there are possibilities of being lost when
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outside at
night
.
For example
, just by some simple searchings, we can easily find many cases of missing
happeing
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happening
during the late hours of
night
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.
However
, I disagree with the idea that using curfew as a tool to restrict
youngers'
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freedom. It is
human
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a human
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right
to be able
moving
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to move
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around freely.
By
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prevent
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preventing
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people from
go
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going
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out at
night
without a
supevisor
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supervisor
,
government
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the government
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has directly disclaimed that basic
right
eventhough
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even though
that is
for
teenagers
' good.
Furthermore
, going out with an adult is not always a feasible choice for children
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with
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those who have parents or caretakers
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who work
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work
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late
such
as doctors, guardians or 24-hour store employees. In
this
case, even returning home from
friend's
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or relative's house can be a big problem. In conclusion,
although
government should have some rules to prevent
teenagers
from
geting
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getting
outside when it is late,
i
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still believe that there should
be reconstruct
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to suit
with
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different demands.
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