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Some people think the government funding should not be used for supporting art and culture, others think supporting cultural activities may be beneficial for the population and the culture. Discuss both views and give your own opinion?

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It has been argued by many that the government should not fund art as it is a sheer waste of resources as the money can be spent on the uplift of basic necessities of life, whereas others believe that spending on
such
 activities is necessary to keep the values of a nation alive. In my opinion, I fully agree with the former belief that the humanity takes priority and the state should stop supporting fields like culture. On the one hand, a huge amount is required for the uplift of cultural services and consumes a lot of the country's revenue. There is a strong vibe that
this
 practice should be curbed and I
also
 believe so.
Firstly
, the portion of the budget spent on the exhibitions can be used for the betterment of poor population.
Secondly
, the civic facilities can be improved if adequate amount is available to the rulers.
Moreover
, progress in the field of art has just an abstract value and don't generate any financial benefit, so it's better to invest in other sectors like the power generation, import and export, education and food supply.
For instance
, the same concept has been followed in true letter and spirit in many countries of the world like Thailand.
On the other hand
, many intellectuals believe that the nations must keep their traditions alive by promoting their inherited values.
Firstly
, it will keep them connected to their past.
Secondly
, it will strengthen the bondage among the people.
Furthermore
, the uniqueness of the nation
is being maintained
Suggestion
are being maintained
 by
such
 activities. So, in order to maintain an integrity of a nation, it's thought that the economists must make plans for the upkeep of the folk activities.
For example
, the Turkish government is famous for its spending on traditional framework. To conclude, I believe that in
this
 era where poverty and other humanitarian crises are at their peak, it's obligatory for the lawmakers to give priority to
such
 issues rather than spending on the music and fashion industry.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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