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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #numbers #students
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Nowadays, many people argue that colleges must accept their applicants based on their
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. Personally, I completely disagree with
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 idea. My main reasons for
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 are that there may be different interests and strengths between male and female
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, forcing universities to accept equal-
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students
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 may lead to some issues with merit-based admissions. First and foremost,
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 human nature, there are some differences between male and female brains and strength.
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, some jobs like engineering that require lifting heavy parts will not be suitable for females so engineering colleges will not be familiar to females.
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, nursing and education fields are not popular in male communities.
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, requiring equal ratios of
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 in all subjects will limit the choices and opportunities in front of applicants
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 rather than their interests and strengths.
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, it is important to accept the fact that there is not always the same number of applicants whether male or female for a certain subject. So, colleges should not lower their limits of qualifications and standard admissions simply to achieve the
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 quota. The main goal of universities is to have qualified graduates who will build their nations, regardless of
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. In conclusion,
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-based standard admission proved its failure
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 some reasons. One of them, there is a difference between men’s and women’s abilities and interests.
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, universities will accept unqualified
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 to achieve the
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 quota, regardless of their qualifications. In my point of view, I completely disagree with
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 idea for the mentioned reasons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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