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You recently did a short course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter Describe what you enjoyed about the course Say how much cooking you have done since the course Suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my appreciation
about
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 the cookery
course
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 which I passed.
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, as you asked, I will give my feedback about
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 program. The process of learning how to cook was very plain and well-organized.
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, a lot of recipes were presented to the students and they were perfectly ordered from simple to advanced.
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, one of the first lessons was how to prepare
simple
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a simple
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 vegetable soup with only five ingredients and 20 minutes of preparation,
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 our
last
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 dish was a jelly cake consisting of five layers
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 each of the layers was cooked by ourselves.
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, the strongest part of
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 education is a mentor who helps you from the very first steps till the end of the
course
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. Unless my teacher explained to me how to steer hot jelly I would not be able to finish the jelly cake.
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 of the shared efforts from my, mentors and with amazing knowledge base compiled into
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course
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, I have accomplished the main goal that I had targeted before it started, to learn how to cook tasty and healthily.
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, I have reduced the amount of money I spend on delivery and restaurants. In conclusion, I would like to say that I am looking forward to another cookery
course
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 of yours,
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, "Italian cuisine" or "China cuisine". Faithfully yours, Vladimir

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coherence and cohesion
To enhance coherence and cohesion, ensure each paragraph fully explores a single idea.
task achievement
While your task response is strong, consider expanding on the specifics of your suggestions for an additional course.
task achievement
The letter provides a complete response to the task prompt, addressing all necessary elements: enjoyment of the course, cooking done since then, and a suggestion for a new course.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate and polite, fitting the formal letter format.
coherence and cohesion
Logical structure is maintained with a clear progression from enjoyment of the course to the impact it had, concluding with future suggestions.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • course structure
  • teaching methods
  • skills gained
  • cuisines
  • dishes
  • cooking regime
  • apply skills
  • personal preferences
  • lasting impact
  • specific cuisine
  • cooking style
  • course offerings
  • advanced courses
  • specialized courses
  • food trends
  • dietary needs
  • class timings
  • online options
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