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In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Aged
care
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 living in certain countries is subsidised by the government.
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 a few people support
this
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, others oppose it. In my view, elder relatives should pay for the
care
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 provided.
This
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 essay will elaborate
further
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 on my stance. When
parents
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 enter
retirement
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 age, it is an obligation of their children and other
families
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 to take
care
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 of them in their old age.
Parents
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 have provided their children with extensive love and
care
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 in their entire lives,
not to mention
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 the cost and energy spent. In turn, it is now the younger generations' responsibility to provide for their
parents
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.
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, there is a tendency for
families
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 to neglect their seniors when they retire. The obligation to fund the
services
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 of
retirement
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 homes constantly will indeed have a knock-on effect on the relationship between seniors and their
families
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. Family members are constantly reminded of their elders, and there will be more inclination towards visiting their seniors.
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, when the government funds aged
care
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 facilities,
families
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 have less control over the quality of
care
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 provided to their elders.
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, If the government pays for the facility, they will generalise the
services
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 given among other
retirement
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 facilities, and
this
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 will depend on the economy of a country.
Families
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 will not be able to maintain a certain standard for their
parents
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'
care
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. It is
then
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 suggested that the honour of supporting aged
care
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services
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 financially should be given to the relatives.
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, I think family members should pay for
services
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 in
retirement
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 homes. Not only does it remind them to respect their elder, but it
also
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 enables
families
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 to maintain the standard of
care
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 provided by aged
care
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.

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