Increasing number of people are choosing cosmetology surgery to improve their appearance. What are the reasons? Do you think is it a positive or negative development?
There is a widely held perception in many parts of the world today that, nowadays more and more
people
are interested in cosmetology
surgery
to improve their appearance. There are several reasons for this
development. I think that it has negatively affected our lives and society. In my opinion, there are two main drawbacks to this
situation. In this
essay, I will briefly discuss some of the major causes of this
problem and also
offer some possible solutions to this
.
First and foremost, I personally believe that cosmetology
surgery
might be bad or become worse. People
, especially, women are trying to be beautiful and pretty girls. However
, surgeries have negatively affected our faces. I definitely disagree with this
trend. Because they can cause a lot of serious illnesses. For
this
reason, it is harmful to our health.
On the other hand
, many doctors maybe do
not know about operations. Yet, they want to earn more money. Because Wrong verb form
may
people
are ready to pay more money to improve their appearance. After the operation,they get worse and worse. Even cosmetology
surgery
causes them to die. For instance
, I know one person who lived in the USA. He decided to take operation. After six months surgery
killed him. Despite such
grave drawbacks, I would like to say that beauty is important for our life and future. For instance
, if people
love themselves then
they do anything that they wish.
To conclude
, I once reiterate my position that , nowadays the amount of people
who are choosing cosmetology
surgery
is increasing. I personally believe that it is a negative development.Submitted by asqar4997 on
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task response
The essay addresses the topic of increasing interest in cosmetology surgery and discusses reasons and the writer's opinion on whether it is positive or negative. However, the points lack depth and clarity, leading to a limited response to the task.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion. The progression of ideas is somewhat logical, but the development of main points is lacking in depth and coherence.
