Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than local when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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contemporary
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epoch,
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countries tend to attain more capital from tourism policy. Some individuals consider that the government couldn't
takes
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measure
more
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affordable
prices
in favour of foreign tourists when they participate in local cultural activities. As a matter of fact, I partly agree with
this
statement. In
this
essay, I will illustrate the pros and cons of tourism policy based on my point of view and support it with examples as well.
To begin
with, defining higher
prices
is considered
fair
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decision. Because people who come from other countries for certain purposes
for
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example, visiting cultural monuments and places,
they
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make considerably the majority.
Therefore
the government demand
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more money
to
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for
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better quality services, rebuilding the cultural proximity for
foreigns
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foreign
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. İf the
less
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prices
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offered
local
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people, later
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the
foreign
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visitors notice big differences, they normally think that it is
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transaction and avoid
from
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this
unusual business policy. But most entrepreneurs don't tend to take a risk
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this
occasion.
To conclude
, if the regimen firmly
implemenses
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implemented
implements
some protocols regarding high
prices
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of toursim
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toursim
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tourism
services for all of them,
this
implementation is not affordable for locals,
however
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foreigns who visit from
the
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developed countries
dont
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don't
have difficulties related to excessive
prices
.
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