Some people think the cheap air flight gives ordinary people more freedom. However, others think that cheap air flights should be banned because it pollutes the air and brings many problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Nowadays, numerous
people
are having opportunity
to explore and travel because of the low-cost airfare, Add an article
the opportunity
an opportunity
however
some Add a comma
,however
people
think that this
gives middle class
Add a hyphen
middle-class
people
to enjoy their freedom, while
others think that this
should be banned because it gives air
pollution and creates a lot of chaos. This
essay will discuss both views and give my opinion.
On one hand, cheap airfare gives normal people
the chance to travel and enjoy their free will, considering that not everyone has good
financial capability to go Add an article
the good
for
a trip. Change preposition
on
Moreover
the budget airfare Add a comma
,Moreover
are
just safe compared to the classic one, Change the verb form
is
thus
ordinary people
still feel secured
and protected. Wrong verb form
secure
Furthermore
, those
Change preposition
for those
people
working overseas and want to go back home to spend sometime
with their families, their option is the cheapest fare and Replace the word
some time
save
their money for other important things.
After all the low-cost Wrong verb form
saving
flight
give moments to Fix the agreement mistake
flights
the
normal Correct article usage
apply
people
to adore more freedom.
On the other hand
, flying by planes
can pollute the Fix the agreement mistake
plane
air
since it burn
fuel that Change the verb form
burns
produce
carbon dioxide ,Change the verb form
produces
thus
contribute
Wrong verb form
contributing
in
global warming. Change preposition
to
However
, there are other factors contribute
to Correct pronoun usage
that contribute
air
pollution like wildfires, electricity, heat and cars, that should be given priorities
in greenhouse gas Fix the agreement mistake
priority
emission
. Fix the agreement mistake
emissions
In addition
, cheap flight brings a lot of struggle
like baggage restriction, Change the noun form
struggles
incovenient
departure, and changing dates are just fine for Correct your spelling
inconvenient
the
Correct article usage
apply
travelers
, since they still want to pursue their journey. Polluting Change the spelling
travellers
air
is considered in global aviation as well as
many problems on Add an article
the trip
trip
, Fix the agreement mistake
trips
however
banning cheap flights will not stop Add a comma
,however
middle class
Add a hyphen
middle-class
people
in
travelling.
In conclusion, ordinary Change preposition
from
people
enjoy their freedom to explore the world because of the budget fare but considering to fly in effecient
aircraft by flying convenient Correct your spelling
efficient
flightpaths
to reduce delays. Correct your spelling
flight paths
Furthermore
taking the right measure like aviation
sector should invest Correct article usage
the aviation
low-carbon
alternative Change preposition
in low-carbon
fuel
to decrease green gas Fix the agreement mistake
fuels
emmision
.Correct your spelling
emission
emissions
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