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It is generally believe that some people are born with certain talent, for instance for sport or music and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be thought to become a god sport person or musician. Discus both these views and give your opinion.

#people #talent #sport #music #child #god #person #musician #discus
In recent decades, parents expect their
children
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 some extraordinary talent in the
filed
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 of education,
sport
 and
music
 etc. It is often said that
,
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 most
of
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the
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children's
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children
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 are born with some special intelligence in
sport
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 or
music
,
however
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 others believe that there is no impact on
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brith
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birth
 condition of
child
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the child
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. In
this
essay
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i
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 will discuss both
view
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 and provide my own opinion. perhaps the main reason to think people about
children
's talent
on
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 birth
to
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 rely
during
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on
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 growing up
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on
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an
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 early
ages
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.
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, if
a
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children
 have
interest
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an interest
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on
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in
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 sports like cricket, football, basketball etc and if he
like
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likes
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music
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the music
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 he can sing
by
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 his heart. For
this
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these
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consequences
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consequence
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,
parents
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their parents
his parents
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 never worried about
him
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his
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to
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physical development
for
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 attending sports
as well as
mental
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his mental
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 development to sing some
music
.
Childrean
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Children
are
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is
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 interested
on
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in
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 these
sport
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sports
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 when
he
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they
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 can play and understand of importance
on
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 these things.
By
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this
 way
children's
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children
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 can develop not only a good environment but
also
creates
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 a good friend circle
also
.
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result
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 he will be attentive
on
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to
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 his daily
works
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 i.e. education, health and others. Despite these arguments, there is
also
 a case for the idea that
,
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a childrean
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childrean
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children
 is dipped into mobile games and never goes to
plays
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play
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ports
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sports
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 or
music
 with
friend
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a friend
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 because of
lack
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a lack
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 of interest
on
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in
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 those. Perhaps they don't have any interest
on
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 that and
this
 nature
don't
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comes
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 by born. But most
of
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the
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children's
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children
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 can be able to think about a good
sport
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sports
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 and
music
.
For example
,
children's
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children
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 are very excited if anyone
play
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plays
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 some games or
music
 in front
them
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of them
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. In a nutshell, I strongly believe that child
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are started
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have started
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 their life
on
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in
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 the world with some particular intellectual
behavior
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behaviour
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on
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in
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 various
field
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fields
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whereas
 other people can
argued
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 my opinion.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innate abilities
  • Predispose
  • Excel
  • Commitment
  • Natural talent
  • Environmental factors
  • Genetics
  • Physical attributes
  • Musical inclination
  • Early exposure
  • Dedication
  • Surpass
  • Nurture
  • Hard work
  • Anecdotes
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