It is generally believe that some people are born with certain talent, for instance for sport or music and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be thought to become a god sport person or musician. Discus both these views and give your opinion.

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others believe that there is no impact on
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and provide my own opinion. perhaps the main reason to think people about
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physical development
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development to sing some
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can develop not only a good environment but
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i.e. education, health and others. Despite these arguments, there is
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or
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those. Perhaps they don't have any interest
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can be able to think about a good
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are very excited if anyone
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some games or
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. In a nutshell, I strongly believe that child
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the world with some particular intellectual
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whereas
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my opinion.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innate abilities
  • Predispose
  • Excel
  • Commitment
  • Natural talent
  • Environmental factors
  • Genetics
  • Physical attributes
  • Musical inclination
  • Early exposure
  • Dedication
  • Surpass
  • Nurture
  • Hard work
  • Anecdotes
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