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Some museums and art galleries charge admission fees, while others have free entry. Do you think the advantages of charging for admission outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Museums
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 and
galleries
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 are important to the public as they educate historical knowledge and promote arts. Some of these
facilities
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 charge
people
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 for
entry
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,
while
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 others have free
admission
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. In my view, I would argue that there are more benefits to including an
entry
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 fee rather than drawbacks. The advantages and disadvantages will be examined
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 in
this
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 essay. There are several advantages to charging
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fees
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 in the two public buildings.
Firstly
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, with better funding, administrators can constantly develop the facility. The content and
art
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 displayed,
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, can be constantly renewed every season.
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, the interiors and lighting of the building will continue to be renovated when necessary.
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,
fees
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 will restrict the amount or type of
people
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 entering
galleries
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 or
museums
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. To illustrate
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, some free
museums
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 can get overcrowded and visitors will have a hard time enjoying the content exhibited.
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, with free
admission
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, children sometimes disrupt
art
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galleries
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 by running and making loud noises.
On the other hand
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, there are some drawbacks to
entry
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fees
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. Limited access means limited
people
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 can be educated and enjoy
art
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 exhibitions.
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, some
people
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 may be appalled by the
entry
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 costs of exhibitions. They become reluctant to visit these
facilities
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 which may educate their children or provide entertainment for them.
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, with fewer
people
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 visiting the
facilities
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, it can have a knock-on effect on the
museums
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 and
galleries
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 themselves. If there are not enough visitors, they would not be able to be maintained and upkeep costs cannot be covered.
To conclude
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, I think the positives of
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 costs outweigh the negatives. If the
fees
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 can be managed so that more
people
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 can afford them,
museums
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 and
art
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galleries
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 can continue to develop their
facilities
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 and content, which not only provide historical education, but
also
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 entertainment for society.
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