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Some believe that people are naturally born as leaders while others feel that leadership skills can develop. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
people
 think that great leaders are born and not made. Others,
however
, feel that
leadership
 skills are developed over time through training, experience and mentoring. In my opinion, good
leadership
 is a combination of both natural abilities and persistent practice. Those who feel that
leadership
 is a characteristic that some
people
 are born with might argue that good leaders possess optimism and energy that will encourage others to work together effectively. In fact, some studies have shown that these characteristics are genetic, as are certain individual talents that one may be blessed with at birth.
Furthermore
,
people
such
 as Barack Obama, have a certain charisma that allows them to inspire passion and energy in others, and
this
 particular trait is
also
 believed to be innate.
Nevertheless
, many
people
 consider
leadership
 a skill that can be learnt. There are other elements that make someone a great leader,
such
 as discipline and resourcefulness, which can definitely be developed through
ones
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 childhood/
up-bringing
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.
Furthermore
, the credibility of a true leader is built on his self-confidence and mastery of his area of expertise which only
emerge
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 after a great deal of time and experience. Without these qualities, a leader’s capability may be questioned, and
as a result
,
people
 are unlikely to heed the leader’s direction. Personally, I think the skills and attributes of a good leader are both genetic and enhanced through training, experience and a lot of persistent hard work. There are many
people
 born without natural
leadership
 skills that can still become good leaders in the future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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