Today, many people do not realize how important the natural world is. Why is this? How can people learn more about the importance of the natural world?

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people tend to look toward the benefits without concern about the negative effects it brings back. The result is ignorance about the significant role of the natural
world
that surrounds them. There are several reasons behind
this
phenomenon and several solutions should be adopted by governments and individuals to tackle the situation. The main reason is that we don’t have the
time
and mind to pay intention to the subject. Humans are caught in a busy lifestyle, neither it was being obligated to stay all day in an office
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working
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at home.
This
means we don’t have much
time
to bother to care about anything else
besides
our own business.
For example
,
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and those who are still pursuing education, the school system
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them to sit in classes for 8 hours or more
in
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a day.
This
is because they have few hours to play outside and observe the natural
world
around them.
Furthermore
, festivals and carnivals about nature,
such
as spring or harvest celebrations, have disappeared over
time
. The young generation these days is not interested in the natural
world
anymore.
Instead
, they become distracted or even addicted to social media and modern technology. In consequence, society ignored the crucial role played by the natural
world
surrounding us. There are several measures that could be taken to prevent
this
problem.
For instance
, some companies make it a requirement to send some of the employees to sign up for
environment
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protections
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at their local places. People themselves can voluntarily take part in these events to gain some life experiences and get to know others. As for the school system, they should balance
between
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study and relaxation.
In addition
, schools should give children or students a reasonable
time
to relax and play outside so that they could get
time
to know the natural surrounding.
Subsequently
, not only changing the lifestyle but
also
celebrating
to remember
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the important role of the natural
world
by holding lots of festivals and carnivals with environmental themes. Not only will it help people to remember the meaning of the event and connect with others,
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will be attracted to come and make
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for
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the
local
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and the economy at the same
time
. In conclusion,
it is clear that
in today’s
world
, the importance of natural environments is not realized by a plethora of individuals. Proper solutions,
such
as volunteering for environmental work and additional
time
for pupils to know the
naturalsurroundings
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natural surroundings
willl
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keep in mind the
world
they are living
inas
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in as
well as
thes
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the
reasonsfor
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reasons for
understanding
about
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nature.
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