Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment——doing things they like to do——rather than doing things they should do.

Nowadays, many
people
think that
people
they don'
t
understand are always doing what they like
instead
of what they really should be doing, which is often what
people
who don'
t
understand
others
want
others
to do
instead
of doing themselves. I don'
t
agree with that.
On the contrary
, I think
people
nowadays are always doing what they should be doing
instead
of what they really like.
Today
, many
people
are forced to do
things
they don'
t
want to do because of family
pressure
.
For example
, some
people
's parents want their children to get married early. And sometimes maybe their children could have put all their energy into interpersonal communication and learning, getting better personal skills and having better future opportunities. In
this
case, because they do not want to have family conflicts with their parents, they are forced to marry at the best age, and
then
the focus of
life
will inevitably be on the new family, losing the good chance to realize their self-worth. So young
people
today
may feel pressured by their families to do what
others
think they should do.
On the other hand
, there are some
people
who do what they have to do
instead
of what they like because of some social
pressure
. In
today
's China, college entrance and employment
pressure
is
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very great. For
students
, their whole
life
is only
study
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, except sleeping and eating basically all
in
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study
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, and
such
a miserable
life
, basically every senior three
students
have 15 hours a day
is
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spent in
this
aspect, it is no exaggeration to say that the whole year off. At the same time, when the result of an exam is not what
others
expect,
students
will bear great psychological
pressure
, and there are
students
committing suicide every year. It can be said that few of them really love learning, and they have to do it for the sake of their families and their future survival. After all, nowadays, even the top universities in China, PKU and THU, have few advantages in
the
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job interview. So
people
may be under social
pressure
to do something they should do for the future, rather than something they really like to do.
People
who are forced to do
things
they don'
t
want to do,
they
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have no way to enjoy
life
and
life
. They may not be able to have many hobbies because their lives are filled with so many
things
and hobbies may no longer have time for them,and in order to make themselves less sad,
people
choose to forget as much as possible, and over time, have lost the enthusiasm to retain
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in everything. In general, I think
people
today
are always doing
things
they should be doing
instead
of
things
they like to relax and enjoy. They are always under
pressure
from all sides to make a choice that everyone wants, even if it is not the outcome they want. So I don'
t
agree with that.
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