Doctors, nurses and teachers make a great contribution society and should be payed more than entertainment and sports celebrities.

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place in our life. They to heal us and
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must pay them more As
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teachers
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because of
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government must pay more for
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, it is true that sports are good for health but officials must not pay for sport any more. They necessary
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for education and hospitals
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is important for
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. The state has to pay a lot of
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provided with money. The government should pay them, not for sports, etc.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribution
  • essential services
  • long hours
  • stressful
  • well-being
  • development
  • entertain
  • inspire
  • exorbitant salaries
  • unfair
  • talented individuals
  • professions
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