Many working people get little or no excercise either during tge working days or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not to get enough excerise? What can be done about this problem.
In
this
modern era, Most of
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apply
the
individuals are not used to Correct article usage
apply
do
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exercising
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exercise
due to
their busy day-to-day routine. Therefore
it causes many health
issues. This
essay will discuss the issues and will explore feasible solutions.
To begin
with, There are several reasons why people
not
get enough workouts. Change the verb form
do not
did not
Firstly
, It is because of the time
. People
are extremely packed with their day-to-day work. Some individuals do two jobs to survive. For example
, One of my friends in Sri Lanka, works for Uber
taxi company, after his 8.00am-5.00pm job.Correct article usage
an Uber
Secondly
some Add a comma
,Secondly
people
prefer to enjoy their free time
without doing anything. Because they are fed-up on weekdays due to
office work. Therefore
they need their free time
to relax.
As a solution for
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to
this
problem, companies can arrange gym facilities for their employees at working permisses. For instance
, most of the apparel companies in Sri Lanka have their own fitness centers
inside the office. Change the spelling
centres
In
addition
they provide gym instructor's supervision Add a comma
,addition
on
3 days per week.
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apply
Moreover
working people
can try a new sport such
as yoga, tennis or badminton,
if they are not interested in exercising. It is extremely beneficial to relax the body and mind at the same Remove the comma
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time
. It will help to reduce the stress level. On the other hand
, people
can change their diet plan. Because not only exercise but also
diet plays a major role when it comes to health
.
In conclusion, it is obvious that not doing workouts will affect your health
. therefore
it is always better to work out regularly to maintain good health
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