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Many working people get little or no excercise either during tge working days or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not to get enough excerise? What can be done about this problem.

#people #excercise #tge #time #health #excerise
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In
this
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 modern era, Most
of
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the
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individuals are not used to
do
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exercising
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due to
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 their busy day-to-day routine.
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 it causes many
health
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 issues.
This
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 with, There are several reasons why
people
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not
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 get enough workouts.
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, It is because of the
time
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.
People
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 are extremely packed with their day-to-day work. Some individuals do two jobs to survive.
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, One of my friends in Sri Lanka, works for
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 taxi company, after his 8.00am-5.00pm job.
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Secondly
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 some
people
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 prefer to enjoy their free
time
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 without doing anything. Because they are fed-up on weekdays
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 office work.
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 they need their free
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 to relax. As a solution
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this
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 problem, companies can arrange gym facilities for their employees at working permisses.
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, most of the apparel companies in Sri Lanka have their own fitness
centers
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 inside the office.
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addition
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 they provide gym instructor's supervision
on
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3 days per week.
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 working
people
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 can try a new sport
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 as yoga, tennis or badminton
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 if they are not interested in exercising. It is extremely beneficial to relax the body and mind at the same
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. It will help to reduce the stress level.
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,
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 can change their diet plan. Because not only exercise but
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 diet plays a major role when it comes to
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. In conclusion, it is obvious that not doing workouts will affect your
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.
therefore
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 it is always better to work out regularly to maintain good
health
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.
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