It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of thinking risk, outweigh the disadvantages.

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gets more benefits and
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I would like to
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explain
what are the good and bad possibilities of both sides. First of all, every person
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of risks in their daily life. Owners of some industries
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lent
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of
money
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house holding companies spent more
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advertising for
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populity
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popularity
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this
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get people attraction and they
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lots of items ,
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the game. In some
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they invest
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of
money
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thinking of
risk
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they can not reach their goals and departed
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, financial companies spent their
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of customers but
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they lost
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have both
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benefit
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we can not
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succeed
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risks
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plane
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success is
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easier.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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